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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Describe the overall shift from scientific research to tourism before listing individual map features.
  • Compare what stayed the same (the pier, beach, natural spring and rocks) with what was added or replaced.
  • Group details by location: the western pier and beach, the central hotel and leisure facilities, and the eastern spring, rocks and lookout.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce what the two maps compare.
  2. Give an overview of the island’s main change and any notable features that remain.
  3. Describe the past layout, moving from west to east.
  4. Describe the present layout in the same order and compare new facilities with former features.
Useful vocabulary & examples
be transformed into
to change substantially into a different kind of place or thing

Paradise Island has been transformed into a popular tourist destination.

remain in place
to continue to exist in the same location

The natural spring and the rocks remain in place on the eastern side.

be replaced by
to give way to something new in the same position or role

The small boat was replaced by a cruise ship.

inland from
away from the coast and towards the interior

The hotel complex is located inland from the beach.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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Band 4.0

The alterations regarding the condition of paradise Island in the past and present is represented by the maps. Overall,it is crystal clear that maximum changes are at West direction and it was minimum at East direction. At a fleeting glance , in Paradise Island scientific research station is converted into swimming pool and hotel complex with additional visitor facilities nearby.

Overall, the island has been developed for visitor facilities, replacing the research station and removing the trees shown in the earlier plan. The beach, natural spring and rocks remain, while additional routes connect the new attractions.

Previously, a pier and boat were situated on the western shore. A scientific research station stood nearby, with groups of trees extending across the central area. The beach was in the northwest, the natural spring towards the east and the rocks in the northeast. Few built facilities were shown outside the station.

In the present layout, a hotel complex occupies the former research area and a swimming pool lies just to its north. An open restaurant stands in the centre, with a barbecue area nearby. A cafe has been added near the natural spring, and a scenic lookout is marked close to the northeastern rocks.

The western pier is larger and now serves a cruise ship rather than the smaller boat. Swimming is permitted at the retained beach. A cycle path and connecting routes link the facilities, including the hotel and the eastern attractions. These changes are concentrated around the former open and wooded areas.

Targeted Improvement Tips

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The station is replaced by a hotel complex, with a pool nearby. The pier is larger, a cruise ship replaces the boat, and visitor facilities and a cycle route are added. Rocks, spring and beach remain.
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Use an overview and group details by the actual comparison rather than describe every label in turn.
3
Check the quoted revisions and retain precise figures, dates, locations and tone.

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