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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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Task 1

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Describe the overall shift from scientific research to tourism before listing individual map features.
Compare what stayed the same (the pier, beach, natural spring and rocks) with what was added or replaced.
Group details by location: the western pier and beach, the central hotel and leisure facilities, and the eastern spring, rocks and lookout.

Suggested structure

Introduce what the two maps compare.
Give an overview of the island’s main change and any notable features that remain.
Describe the past layout, moving from west to east.
Describe the present layout in the same order and compare new facilities with former features.

Useful vocabulary & examples

be transformed into: to change substantially into a different kind of place or thing
Paradise Island has been transformed into a popular tourist destination.
remain in place: to continue to exist in the same location
The natural spring and the rocks remain in place on the eastern side.
be replaced by: to give way to something new in the same position or role
The small boat was replaced by a cruise ship.
inland from: away from the coast and towards the interior
The hotel complex is located inland from the beach.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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Band 5.0

The provided diagrams delineate how an island named Paradise has developed from the past to the present. Overall, it is observed that the area on the left side of the isle has been converted into a hotel complex while the other side totally changed. It can be witnessed from the maps that the pier on the western coast is now served by a cruise ship, whereas a small boat is shown there in the past. In the earlier map, there was also a beach in the northwest and a scientific research station inland from the pier. Several palm trees occupied the central area, while a natural spring and rocks were located on the eastern side.

At present, the beach remains in the northwest, and swimming is permitted there. A swimming pool and a hotel complex have been added nearby, and the research station is no longer shown. The pier remains on the southwest coast, but a cruise ship now appears beside it. The spring and rocks remain in the east, with a scenic lookout added near the rocks. An open restaurant, a café and a barbecue area have also been built around the central and eastern parts of the island. Finally, a cycle path now links the facilities and runs around much of the island.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Revise the overview to state both the major additions and the features that remain, rather than saying the eastern side totally changed.

Organise the detail paragraphs by location: compare the western facilities first, then the central and eastern features.

Check each change sentence for an accurate time relationship and use present perfect forms, such as “has been added,” where appropriate.

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Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

215

Type

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The overview identifies the hotel complex and a changed pier, and the answer describes several important past and present features. However, the claim that “the other side totally changed” overstates the changes: the spring and rocks remain, and several facilities are additions. The response also does not clearly compare all the major changes. Next, identify what remains as well as what is new, and summarise those changes accurately in the overview.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The answer moves from a general overview to details about the earlier and present maps, so the reader can follow the timeline. Phrases such as “In the earlier map” and “At present” help signal the stages. However, the opening overview is vague about the eastern side, and the details could be grouped more clearly by location or by changes. Use one overview sentence, then compare related western and eastern features in a consistent order.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

The response uses relevant map vocabulary, including “scientific research station,” “natural spring” and “scenic lookout,” and generally identifies facilities precisely. Some expressions are unnecessarily formal or awkward, especially “It can be witnessed from the maps” and “the isle.” Replace these with direct, natural reporting language such as “The maps show” and “the island.” Keep specific feature names, but prioritise clear wording over decorative phrasing.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The answer includes a range of structures, including the contrast in “whereas a small boat is shown there in the past,” and most later sentences are complete and understandable. However, “while the other side totally changed” is missing an auxiliary verb for the past-to-present comparison; it should read “while the other side has totally changed.” Review verb tense and auxiliary use, especially when describing changes that began in the past and remain relevant now.

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