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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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200 words AcademicTask 1Bar Chart

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Identify the category that dominates throughout: social welfare leads in all three years, reaching its highest figure in 2014.
Separate steady increases from fluctuating or recovering patterns: health and wildlife rise each year, whereas social welfare falls before rebounding.
Notice categories that finish at or near their starting values: education returns to 8, while environment ends at 7 compared with 8 initially.

Suggested structure

Introduce the chart by naming the measure, the six charity types and the 2012–2014 period.
Give an overview identifying the largest category and the broad direction of change.
Describe social welfare separately because its figures are much higher and fluctuate notably.
Group the remaining categories by pattern, comparing their starting, middle and final figures.
End with a concise comparison of which categories finished higher, level or lower than in 2012.

Useful vocabulary & examples

a steady upward path: A consistent increase across successive years.
Health followed a steady upward path, rising from 6 to 9.
fell before recovering: Decreased at first and then rose again.
Environment fell to 5 before recovering to 7.
returned to its starting figure: Ended at the same value as at the beginning.
Education returned to its starting figure of 8 in 2014.
edged up: Increased by a small amount.
Arts edged up from 3 to 4 in the final year.

Task Prompt

Task 1: The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The presented bar graph outlines the financial participation made by single organization to 6 distinct groups in year 2012, 2013 and 2014. As it is observed the company spends the highest on societal work and average on literacy, healthcare, surroundings and fauna and the least on artistic things. The data depicts that in year 2012 the donation for social welfare was 22, while education and environment both received 8. Health got 6, and wildlife and arts had 3 each. In 2013, social welfare fell to 16, but remained much higher than the other charities. Education decreased to 6 and environment to 5. In contrast, health rose slightly to 7 and wildlife increased to 4. The donation to arts stayed at 3. In 2014, social welfare reached 24, the highest figure on the chart. Health also increased to 9. Education went back to 8, while environment rose to 7. Wildlife got 5 and arts received 4. Overall, the company gave most money to social welfare in all three years, although its amount dropped in 2013 before rising again. Health, wildlife and arts increased over the period, while education ended at the same amount as in 2012, and environment was slightly lower.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace broad or approximate category names with the chart labels: social welfare, education, environment, health, wildlife and arts.

Write a one-sentence overview that states the highest category and the main changes, including social welfare’s dip in 2013 and recovery in 2014.

Before submitting, check articles and tense in the introduction; describe the 2012–2014 figures consistently in the past tense.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

200

Type

Bar Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The answer identifies the main pattern—“the company gave most money to social welfare”—and gives figures for all six categories across the three years, including the social welfare fall and recovery. This makes the chart’s main comparisons clear. However, “average on literacy, healthcare, surroundings and fauna” is imprecise, and the category labels “surroundings” and “artistic things” are not the chart’s wording. Next, use the chart labels and give a concise, data-based overview.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer moves from an introduction and broad summary to the year-by-year figures, then returns to an overall trend in “Overall, the company gave most money to social welfare.” That sequence is understandable, and the years are easy to follow. The initial overview is vague and partly repeats information stated later. For a clearer progression, group the largest category’s trend together and then compare the smaller charities, using brief transitions between those groups.

Lexical Resource

4.5 Band

There is some useful variation in reporting trends, including “fell,” “rose slightly,” “increased,” and “reached.” However, “financial participation” and “artistic things” are unnatural for describing charitable donations, while “average on” does not precisely communicate the comparison. Prefer the chart’s terms, such as “donations,” “social welfare,” and “arts,” and use accurate comparison phrases such as “received less than” or “rose to.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The later sentences often use clear simple patterns, such as “Education decreased to 6 and environment to 5.” The opening, however, has several issues: “by single organization” needs an article, “in year 2012” is not idiomatic, and “As it is observed” is awkward. The answer also shifts from “spends” to past-tense reporting. Edit the introduction for articles and tense, then check each sentence for a consistent past-tense description of the completed period.

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