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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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207 words AcademicTask 1Bar Chart

Task 1

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Identify the category that dominates throughout: social welfare leads in all three years, reaching its highest figure in 2014.
Separate steady increases from fluctuating or recovering patterns: health and wildlife rise each year, whereas social welfare falls before rebounding.
Notice categories that finish at or near their starting values: education returns to 8, while environment ends at 7 compared with 8 initially.

Suggested structure

Introduce the chart by naming the measure, the six charity types and the 2012–2014 period.
Give an overview identifying the largest category and the broad direction of change.
Describe social welfare separately because its figures are much higher and fluctuate notably.
Group the remaining categories by pattern, comparing their starting, middle and final figures.
End with a concise comparison of which categories finished higher, level or lower than in 2012.

Useful vocabulary & examples

a steady upward path: A consistent increase across successive years.
Health followed a steady upward path, rising from 6 to 9.
fell before recovering: Decreased at first and then rose again.
Environment fell to 5 before recovering to 7.
returned to its starting figure: Ended at the same value as at the beginning.
Education returned to its starting figure of 8 in 2014.
edged up: Increased by a small amount.
Arts edged up from 3 to 4 in the final year.

Task Prompt

Task 1: The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The graph illustrates the donation provided to six terms of charitable areas by a company in 3 years since 2012. Overall, Environment’s donation was subject to a downward trend while that of the remaining fields increased over the period. Besides, Social welfare received the most monetary support during the years. As can be seen from the chart, social welfare donations stood at 22 in 2012, fell to 16 in 2013, and then climbed to 24 in 2014, the highest figure shown. Education was given 8 in 2012 and 2014, with a dip to 6 in between. Environment followed a similar but lower pattern, decreasing from 8 to 5 before recovering to 7; therefore, it did not rise overall. Health support increased steadily, from 6 to 7 and then 9. Donations to wildlife also grew each year, from 3 in 2012 to 5 in 2014, while arts funding was unchanged at 3 in the first two years before reaching 4. Thus, although the initial overview describes increases in the other fields, the year-by-year figures show that education and environment fluctuated, with the latter ending below its 2012 level. Social welfare remained by far the largest recipient in all three years, whereas arts and wildlife received the smallest amounts.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the broad overview claim with the actual pattern: social welfare was highest, health, wildlife and arts rose, education fluctuated but ended level, and environment ended below its starting point.

Group the detailed comparisons: give the social welfare figures together, then summarise the lower-value categories with accurate start, dip or recovery, and end figures.

Use a final accuracy check to compare every overview statement with the 2012 and 2014 bars; write the date range as “from 2012 to 2014” rather than “since 2012.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

207

Type

Bar Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response covers all six categories and gives accurate figures, including the peak for social welfare (24) and the rise in health donations from 6 to 9. However, the overview says “the remaining fields increased,” which does not accurately represent education’s unchanged start-to-end figure or environment’s overall fall. The later clarification helps, but the overview should state the broad trends correctly from the outset.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview into category-by-category figures, and linking phrases such as “As can be seen from the chart” make that shift clear. Its final clarification acknowledges the mismatch in the overview, but this creates an avoidable contradiction and repetition. Grouping the information into a clear overview followed by social welfare and the other categories would make the progression smoother; avoid referring back to a conflicting claim.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is some useful range in phrases such as “climbed to 24,” “increased steadily,” and “the highest figure shown.” However, “six terms of charitable areas” is an unnatural description of the chart categories, and “monetary support” is less direct than “donations.” Use the chart’s category label “types of charity” and choose concise trend vocabulary consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The later sentences use several controlled structures, including the contrast in “decreasing from 8 to 5 before recovering to 7.” The preserved opening contains awkward constructions, notably “in 3 years since 2012” and “was subject to a downward trend,” while “Besides” is not a natural linker here. Practise writing a direct date-range introduction and a short, grammatically simple overview before adding complex sentences.

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