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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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212 words AcademicTask 1Bar Chart

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Identify the category that dominates throughout: social welfare leads in all three years, reaching its highest figure in 2014.
Separate steady increases from fluctuating or recovering patterns: health and wildlife rise each year, whereas social welfare falls before rebounding.
Notice categories that finish at or near their starting values: education returns to 8, while environment ends at 7 compared with 8 initially.

Suggested structure

Introduce the chart by naming the measure, the six charity types and the 2012–2014 period.
Give an overview identifying the largest category and the broad direction of change.
Describe social welfare separately because its figures are much higher and fluctuate notably.
Group the remaining categories by pattern, comparing their starting, middle and final figures.
End with a concise comparison of which categories finished higher, level or lower than in 2012.

Useful vocabulary & examples

a steady upward path: A consistent increase across successive years.
Health followed a steady upward path, rising from 6 to 9.
fell before recovering: Decreased at first and then rose again.
Environment fell to 5 before recovering to 7.
returned to its starting figure: Ended at the same value as at the beginning.
Education returned to its starting figure of 8 in 2014.
edged up: Increased by a small amount.
Arts edged up from 3 to 4 in the final year.

Task Prompt

Task 1: The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of donations allocated by a company to six different types of charity over the three- year period from 2012 to 2014. Overall, the donations to social welfare, health, wildlife, arts experienced an upward trend; however, the contribution to education and environment varied between relative stability and slight decrease. Besides, social welfare received the largest donation in all three years, while wildlife and arts had the lowest figures. In 2012, the amount for social welfare was 22, compared with 8 each for education and the environment, 6 for health, and 3 each for wildlife and arts. The figure for social welfare then fell to 16 in 2013, before climbing sharply to 24 in 2014, the highest value shown.

Education decreased from 8 to 6 and then returned to 8, so its overall level was unchanged. The environment followed a similar but slightly lower pattern, falling from 8 in 2012 to 5 in 2013 and recovering to 7 in 2014. By contrast, health rose steadily from 6 to 9 over the period. Wildlife also increased gradually, from 3 to 5, while arts remained at 3 for the first two years and reached 4 in 2014. Overall, the smaller categories changed modestly, unlike the larger movements in social welfare.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening overview with two accurate headline patterns: social welfare fluctuated but ended higher, while health, wildlife, and arts rose overall.

Group the detailed figures by trend: describe the fall-and-recovery patterns for social welfare, education, and the environment, then the steady increases in health and wildlife.

Check the chart for a stated unit before calling the values percentages; if none is provided, use “figures” consistently.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

212

Type

Bar Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The completed answer covers all six charities and reports the main figures accurately, including the peak of 24 for social welfare and the modest increases in health and wildlife. The observation that education returned to 8 after falling to 6 is also useful. However, the opening overview, “experienced an upward trend,” obscures the dip in social welfare, and the trends for education and the environment are grouped imprecisely. Next, make the overview distinguish overall endpoint changes from year-to-year movement.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to a category-by-category account, and the second paragraph gives the reader a clear sequence for comparing the smaller categories. The transitions “By contrast” and “while” help distinguish trends. However, “Besides,” is an awkward transition into the detailed figures, and the opening overview is difficult to follow because several charities are listed without a conjunction. Use a concise overview first, then group categories with similar patterns.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is a useful range of chart language, including “fell,” “climbing sharply,” “rose steadily,” and “recovering,” which makes changes easy to understand. “The highest value shown” also clearly identifies a peak. Some wording is less precise: “the contribution to education and environment” does not clearly distinguish the two categories, and “percentage” is not confirmed by a unit on the chart. Prefer neutral terms such as “figure” or “donation amount” when the unit is unspecified.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The continuation generally uses accurate past-tense clauses and comparisons, such as “Education decreased from 8 to 6 and then returned to 8.” The preserved opening contains noticeable problems: “three- year” has incorrect hyphen spacing, and the list in “social welfare, health, wildlife, arts experienced” lacks a conjunction and has an awkward subject structure. There is also a missing article in “slight decrease.” Proofread lists, hyphenated compounds, and article use before submission.

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