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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Further study was the leading destination for both graduates and postgraduates.
Voluntary work was the least common option in each group.
Graduate counts exceeded postgraduate counts in all four categories, with the biggest absolute difference in further study.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and specify the year and population.
Give an overview of the shared highest and lowest categories.
Report graduate figures in rank order, grouping the leading choices and the smaller categories.
Report postgraduate figures in the same order to make comparisons easy.
Close with the most notable difference between the two groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

the most common destination: The option chosen by the largest number of people.
Further study was the most common destination for both groups.
ranked second: Was the second-highest category in a set of figures.
Part-time work ranked second for graduates.
by contrast: A linking phrase used to introduce a noticeably different figure or fact.
By contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.
the largest difference: The greatest gap between two compared figures.
The largest difference between the groups was in further study.

Task Prompt

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 7.0

The bar chart depicts about the occupation and study status of graduates and postgraduates from the United Kingdom after finishing college,except for full-time work in 2008. In general, the number of pupils who decide to further study are the dramatically highest in both groups. Part-time work and unemployment were moderately common destinations while engaging in voluntary work was the least popular choice.

Among graduates, further study was by far the most common destination, with 29,665 people choosing it. Part-time employment ranked second at 17,735, slightly above unemployment, which accounted for 16,235 graduates. In contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.

A similar pattern can be seen among postgraduates, although the figures were much lower overall. Further study again attracted the largest number, at 2,725, followed closely by part-time work at 2,535. Unemployment was less common, involving 1,625 people, while voluntary work was again the least popular option, with just 345 postgraduates.

Overall, further study was the leading destination and voluntary work the least common for both groups. Graduates outnumbered postgraduates in every category, and the gap was particularly large for further study.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening description with a precise statement that the charts compare destinations for UK graduates and postgraduates who did not enter full-time work in 2008.

Write the overview before the details: state that further study ranks first and voluntary work last in both groups, then mention that graduate figures are higher throughout.

Proofread the first two sentences specifically for subject–verb agreement, accurate group labels, natural collocations, and spaces after commas.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

190

Type

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The completed response identifies the main pattern accurately: “further study was the leading destination and voluntary work the least common for both groups.” It reports all four figures for each group and notes that graduate totals exceed postgraduate totals. However, the opening reference to “occupation and study status” is imprecise for these destination charts. Make the task focus clearer by naming destinations immediately, then keep the overview focused on the shared ranking and the difference in scale.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer is easy to follow because it moves from an overview to graduates, then postgraduates, and ends with a comparison. The grouping is especially clear in “Among graduates” and “A similar pattern can be seen among postgraduates.” The opening sentence’s missing space after “college,” slightly interrupts readability, and the final comparison repeats some overview information. Use clean punctuation and reserve the conclusion for one concise, distinct comparison.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful task vocabulary in “destination,” “undertook voluntary work,” and “accounted for,” and the response distinguishes part-time work from unemployment. Some word choices are inaccurate or awkward: “pupils” does not describe people who have graduated, while “depicts about” and “the dramatically highest” are not natural collocations. Use precise group labels such as “graduates” and “postgraduates,” and prefer straightforward comparison language such as “the highest figure” or “by far the largest group.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The later numerical sentences are mostly well controlled, including the clause “which accounted for 16,235 graduates.” However, the opening has clear errors in “the number … are” and “the dramatically highest,” as well as the missing space in “college,except.” These affect accuracy in a prominent part of the report. Check subject–verb agreement, avoid placing an article before an adverb in this construction, and proofread punctuation before submitting.

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