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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Further study was the leading destination for both graduates and postgraduates.
Voluntary work was the least common option in each group.
Graduate counts exceeded postgraduate counts in all four categories, with the biggest absolute difference in further study.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and specify the year and population.
Give an overview of the shared highest and lowest categories.
Report graduate figures in rank order, grouping the leading choices and the smaller categories.
Report postgraduate figures in the same order to make comparisons easy.
Close with the most notable difference between the two groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

the most common destination: The option chosen by the largest number of people.
Further study was the most common destination for both groups.
ranked second: Was the second-highest category in a set of figures.
Part-time work ranked second for graduates.
by contrast: A linking phrase used to introduce a noticeably different figure or fact.
By contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.
the largest difference: The greatest gap between two compared figures.
The largest difference between the groups was in further study.

Task Prompt

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 6.0

The bar charts given shows the amount of UK graduates and postgraduates went to different pathways after leaving college, instead of working as a full-time job, in 2008. Comparing from the both charts given, it is clear that most of the graduate and postgraduate students chose to continue their studies as a higher level education. Among graduates, further study was the most common destination, with 29,665 people. Part-time work was next at 17,735, followed closely by unemployment, at 16,235. Only 3,500 graduates did voluntary work. For postgraduates, further study also ranked first, at 2,725, but part-time work was almost as popular, with 2,535 people. Unemployment involved 1,625 postgraduates, while voluntary work was again the least common choice, at just 345. For graduates, further study exceeded part-time work by 11,930, while among postgraduates, part-time work was only 190 below further study. Overall, the figures for graduates were higher than those for postgraduates in every category. In both groups, voluntary work was the least popular option, and further study was the leading choice, narrowly ahead of part-time work for postgraduates.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the opening as a concise sentence that names the groups, the year, and the fact that the charts exclude full-time work.

Describe further study as the largest category, rather than implying it accounts for more than half of either group.

Check each figure against its chart and use a consistent comparison pattern: graduates first, then postgraduates, followed by an overall comparison.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

186

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response includes all four destinations and their figures, and it identifies further study and voluntary work as the leading and least common choices. The opening claim that “most of the graduate and postgraduate students” continued studying could suggest that a majority did so, although further study is only the largest individual category. Make the overview more precise by calling it the most common destination, then check that every figure is linked to the correct group.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer moves from a general overview to graduates, then postgraduates, and ends with comparisons; phrases such as “For postgraduates” make the group shift clear. The added comparison of the 11,930 and 190 gaps is useful, though the first two sentences repeat “charts” and “given.” Use a concise introduction and keep the overview distinct from the detailed figures to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

The response uses relevant chart language, including “destination,” “ranked first,” and “least common choice.” However, “amount” is not the natural word for countable people, and “different pathways” is less precise than a description such as destinations or activities. The phrase “as a higher level education” is also awkward. Choose count-focused vocabulary and practise accurate collocations for describing study, work, and unemployment.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The continuation mostly uses clear past-tense comparisons, for example, “further study was the most common destination.” The preserved opening contains several errors: “charts given shows” has subject–verb disagreement, and “postgraduates went” needs a relative clause to connect the people to their destinations. The long opening sentence is also awkwardly constructed. Edit the introduction for plural agreement and use shorter, complete clauses.

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