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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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Task 1

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Further study was the leading destination for both graduates and postgraduates.
Voluntary work was the least common option in each group.
Graduate counts exceeded postgraduate counts in all four categories, with the biggest absolute difference in further study.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and specify the year and population.
Give an overview of the shared highest and lowest categories.
Report graduate figures in rank order, grouping the leading choices and the smaller categories.
Report postgraduate figures in the same order to make comparisons easy.
Close with the most notable difference between the two groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

the most common destination: The option chosen by the largest number of people.
Further study was the most common destination for both groups.
ranked second: Was the second-highest category in a set of figures.
Part-time work ranked second for graduates.
by contrast: A linking phrase used to introduce a noticeably different figure or fact.
By contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.
the largest difference: The greatest gap between two compared figures.
The largest difference between the groups was in further study.

Task Prompt

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 5.0

The bar charts provides information about what Uk Bachelor’s and Master’s degree graduates did after finishing college beside getting a full time job in 2008. Overall, it seems that most graduate students preferred to continue their education,whereas doing voluntary work was the least popular option among students. Looking specifically at Uk graduates, approximately 30 000 people chose further study, making this the most common destination. Part-time work was second, at 17,735, followed by unemployment, with 16,235 people. Only 3,500 graduates did voluntary work.

A similar pattern can be seen among postgraduates. Further study was again the leading choice, with 2,725 people, slightly more than the 2,535 who entered part-time work. Unemployment accounted for 1,625 postgraduates, while voluntary work was the least common option, at 345. In both groups, therefore, further study was most popular and voluntary work was least popular. The number of graduates in each category was much higher than the corresponding postgraduate figure; however, this reflects the different group sizes, and the charts do not give percentages, so comparisons should focus on the rankings rather than proportions.

Targeted Improvement Tips

In the introduction, describe the chart scope precisely: these are destinations excluding full-time work, not all graduates’ destinations.

Use the overview to state the shared ranking once; then compare the two groups with selected figures such as 29,665 versus 2,725 in further study.

Proofread for subject–verb agreement, UK capitalization, spaces after commas, and hyphens in terms such as “full-time work.”

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Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

186

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The answer reports the main pattern accurately: “further study was most popular and voluntary work was least popular,” and includes figures for all four destinations in both groups. The approximate 30,000 figure is consistent with the chart’s 29,665. One limitation is that the introduction’s “most graduate students” is imprecise about the two groups. Keep the overview, but identify graduates and postgraduates distinctly and use “number of people” rather than implying a preference measured by percentages.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The sequence is easy to follow: an overview is followed by the graduate figures and then the postgraduate figures, introduced by “A similar pattern can be seen among postgraduates.” However, the overview and final sentence repeat the same ranking, while the comparison between group sizes needs careful qualification. Keep one concise overview, group related figures together, and reserve the conclusion for a meaningful comparison rather than restating the overview.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The answer uses relevant chart language, including “leading choice,” “accounted for,” and “least common option,” and the categories are generally clear. Some phrasing is awkward or repetitive, especially “beside getting a full time job” and repeated uses of “popular.” Replace the first phrase with “other than full-time work,” and vary descriptions with accurate terms such as “largest category” or “smallest figure.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

Several sentences communicate the comparisons clearly, for example, “Unemployment accounted for 1,625 postgraduates.” However, the opening has a subject–verb error in “The bar charts provides,” and “education,whereas” lacks a space after the comma. “Uk” also needs standard capitalization as “UK.” Check agreement, capitalization, comma spacing, and compound modifiers; then proofread the introduction separately before submitting.

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