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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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216 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Compare the rooms’ capacities, dimensions and weekly prices as the main overview features.
Describe what the rooms share, including their 6-metre width, bathroom position and kitchenette.
Contrast the furnishing: two beds, two desks and a central dining set in the larger room versus one bed and one desk in the single room.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two plans and identify their occupants.
Give an overview of the main contrasts in size, furnishing and rent.
Compare the dimensions, including the shared width and different depths.
Describe shared facilities and then the distinctive furniture in each room.
Conclude with the relationship between capacity, space and weekly price.

Useful vocabulary & examples

room layout: the way furniture and facilities are arranged in a room
The two-person room has a more elaborate layout, with a central dining area.
measures 2.5 metres deep: has a depth of 2.5 metres
The single room measures 2.5 metres deep.
weekly rent: the amount paid to use accommodation for one week
The weekly rent is $350 for the room for two people.
by contrast: used to introduce a difference between two things
By contrast, the single room contains only one bed and one study desk.

Task Prompt

The plan below shows a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The maps illustrate the layout plans of 2 different rooms specifically designed to accommodate a single and two occupants in an Australian university. Overall, it is noticeable from the 2 maps that there are several major differences between 2 rooms, in terms of widths, prices and the number of in-room facilities along with their placement. The two-person room measures 6 metres by 4 metres, whereas the single room has the same 6-metre length but is only 2.5 metres wide. Weekly rent is $350 for the larger room and $200 for the smaller one.

In the shared room, two beds are positioned along the right-hand side, with one desk beside the upper wall and another near the bottom. A round table with two chairs occupies the central area. The bathroom is in the upper-left corner, while a stove and sink are arranged down the left side. In comparison, the one-person room contains a single bed on the right and one desk near the top. It also has a bathroom in the upper-left corner, with cooking and washing facilities grouped at the lower-left end. Unlike the room for two, it has no dining table or second desk, and its reduced width leaves less open floor space. These differences explain the higher weekly cost of the larger room.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the broad overview phrase “number of in-room facilities” with the main visible contrasts: the two-person room has two beds and desks, while the single room has one of each.

Compare the dimensions and weekly rents together in one concise sentence, checking that each number is paired with the correct room.

Use parallel comparison forms, such as “one desk in the single room and two in the shared room”, and proofread articles in phrases referring to the two specific rooms.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

216

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The completed response covers the key comparisons, including “6 metres by 4 metres” versus “2.5 metres wide”, the weekly rents, and differences in beds, desks and shared furniture. These details make the overview relevant and the comparison sufficiently developed. The opening’s reference to “the number of in-room facilities” is broad, however; a next step is to state the clearest shared and distinguishing features directly in the overview.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to dimensions and prices, then describes the two-person room before comparing the single room. The transition “In comparison” helps the reader follow the contrast. However, the opening sentence beginning “Overall” is wordy and repeats “2 maps” and “2 rooms”. For a cleaner progression, group the main overview contrasts first, then organise the body around dimensions and layout.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

Relevant terms such as “upper-left corner”, “central area” and “grouped at the lower-left end” communicate location clearly, while “weekly rent” suits the map. Some wording is less precise: “in-room facilities” could cover too many things, and “cooking and washing facilities” is less specific than naming the stove and sink. Next, use concise map vocabulary and identify visible items by name where possible.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

The continuation uses a good mix of comparison and relative structures, for example “whereas the single room has the same 6-metre length” and “which” is not needed to make the descriptions clear. The preserved opening has less controlled phrasing in “a single and two occupants” and “between 2 rooms”. Revise those constructions for parallelism and a definite comparison; also check articles and number formatting before submitting.

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