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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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Task 1

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The clearest overall change is the rise in gate capacity from 8 gates at present to 18 after redevelopment.
The airport keeps its basic left-right arrangement: departures are on the left and arrivals on the right.
The future plan adds passenger services and replaces the walkway with a sky-train connection.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the task and identify the airport and planned timeframe.
Give an overview of the largest changes, especially the increase in gates and added facilities.
Describe the present terminal arrangement and its connection to the gates.
Explain the future concourse shape, new services and sky-train link.
End with a concise comparison of what stays similar and what changes.

Useful vocabulary & examples

gate capacity: The number of gates an airport can provide for passengers and aircraft.
The redevelopment will increase gate capacity from 8 to 18.
branch into two arms: To divide into two extending sections from a central point.
The future concourse will branch into two arms.
baggage-drop facilities: Places where passengers can hand over checked luggage.
Baggage-drop facilities are shown in the redeveloped terminal.
sky-train connection: A train link that transports passengers between airport areas.
A sky-train connection will serve the expanded gate area.

Task Prompt

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 9.0

The map illustrates the changes that will take place at Southwest Airport from the present to the following year after an upgrade. Overall, the airport will be expanded with more facilities and an improved transportation system to enhance customer service. Currently, the airport layout features a walkway entrance leading to eight gates. Further down, it is divided into two sections: departures on the left and arrivals on the right, with security/passport control and passport control/customs positioned above them. The current gate area is reached by a walkway and contains gates 1 to 8, while check-in and a café are also provided.

After redevelopment, this basic terminal arrangement will remain, but additional passenger facilities will be available, including a bag-drop point, an ATM and car hire, alongside check-in and a café. The most significant change is the expansion of the gate network: the number of gates will increase from eight to 18, extending out on both sides of the central route. A Sky train will run along this route between the terminal and the gates. Overall, the plans retain the airport’s principal departure and arrival functions while substantially enlarging the gate area and offering passengers more services and a new transport option.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the overview more comparative by stating that the gate count rises from 8 to 18, then identify the sky train as the major transport addition.

Use explicit subjects such as “the terminal” instead of “it” when describing sections, so each sentence has a clear reference.

Keep interpretations tied to visible evidence: describe the new services and transport link rather than asserting an unshown benefit such as improved customer service.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

9.0

Excellent

Words

203

Type

Process Diagram

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

8.5 Band

The answer gives a clear overview of expansion and improved transport, then contrasts the current eight gates with the planned 18. It also reports the key terminal functions and new amenities, including “an ATM and car hire.” This covers the main changes without adding invented figures. For an even sharper report, state directly in the overview that the gate count more than doubles and name the sky train as the main transport addition.

Coherence & Cohesion

8.5 Band

The sequence moves logically from an overall summary to the current layout and then the redevelopment, and the contrast in “After redevelopment” makes the timeline easy to follow. Grouping facilities and gate expansion in the future section also helps readers compare the plans. The final sentence repeats the overview slightly; you could use that space to clarify how the new central route connects the terminal and the expanded gate area.

Lexical Resource

8.0 Band

Relevant terms such as “gate network,” “bag-drop point” and “passport control/customs” make the description specific to the diagram, while “substantially enlarging” conveys the scale of change. The phrase “to enhance customer service” is plausible but describes an intended benefit that the diagram does not explicitly establish. Prefer neutral wording such as “adding passenger facilities and transport options,” and use “redevelopment” consistently for the planned changes.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

8.0 Band

The response uses accurate complex structures, including the relative clause in “a walkway entrance leading to eight gates” and the colon introducing the gate-count comparison. The sentence beginning “Further down, it is divided” is understandable, though “it” has a somewhat unclear reference because it could mean the airport or terminal. Name the terminal explicitly there; this small change would make an already controlled description more precise.

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