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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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Task 1

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The clearest overall change is the rise in gate capacity from 8 gates at present to 18 after redevelopment.
The airport keeps its basic left-right arrangement: departures are on the left and arrivals on the right.
The future plan adds passenger services and replaces the walkway with a sky-train connection.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the task and identify the airport and planned timeframe.
Give an overview of the largest changes, especially the increase in gates and added facilities.
Describe the present terminal arrangement and its connection to the gates.
Explain the future concourse shape, new services and sky-train link.
End with a concise comparison of what stays similar and what changes.

Useful vocabulary & examples

gate capacity: The number of gates an airport can provide for passengers and aircraft.
The redevelopment will increase gate capacity from 8 to 18.
branch into two arms: To divide into two extending sections from a central point.
The future concourse will branch into two arms.
baggage-drop facilities: Places where passengers can hand over checked luggage.
Baggage-drop facilities are shown in the redeveloped terminal.
sky-train connection: A train link that transports passengers between airport areas.
A sky-train connection will serve the expanded gate area.

Task Prompt

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The two diagrams compare the difference the instructure of Southwest airport currently and next year. Overall, the area gates and arrivals will be expanded but nothing have change in the region of security passport control and passport control customs. The shape of gates area will be reinstructed from retangle to Y-shape. The amounts of gates will increase from 8 to 18, and the long straight gate corridor will become a Y-shaped one. In the current plan, gates 1 to 8 are arranged beside the narrow corridor, while after development gates 1 to 18 will be placed along three branches. The main terminal will stay in the same position, with security and passport control on the left side and passport control and customs on the right. The departures area remain at the left and arrivals at the right. There will also be more facilities for passengers. At present, the plan shows check-in, a café and a walkway. Next year, bag drop and an ATM will be added, and a sky train and car hire will also be available. The check-in and café are retained. Overall, the airport will have more gates and services, while the central terminal layout and the two passenger areas remain largely same.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a two-part overview that names the major physical change (the 8-gate corridor becomes a Y-shaped 18-gate layout) and the addition of passenger services.

Check every statement about what stays the same against the diagram; avoid saying the arrivals area expands unless a clear increase in its footprint is visible.

After drafting, check subject–verb agreement and countable nouns, especially “the area remains” and “the number of gates.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.0 Band

The completed response identifies the main change: gates rise from 8 to 18 and the corridor becomes Y-shaped. It also compares facilities and the terminal sides. However, the claim that “arrivals will be expanded” is not clearly supported by the plans, and the overview says little about the new passenger services. Next, prioritise the unmistakable changes—gate numbers, shape and added facilities—and describe unchanged areas cautiously.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to gate changes, the terminal layout and passenger facilities, so readers can follow its main sequence. “There will also be more facilities for passengers” provides a useful transition. However, the repeated overall statements and unclear opening make the progression less controlled. Group current and future facilities together, then finish with one concise summary rather than repeating the overview.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Some task vocabulary is appropriately specific, including “Y-shaped,” “bag drop” and “car hire.” However, forms such as “instructure,” “reinstructed” and “retangle” make key descriptions difficult to understand, while “amounts of gates” is an unsuitable collocation. Learn and check the standard terms “layout,” “reconfigured,” “rectangle” and “number of gates,” then use them consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

The response communicates several comparisons through simple clauses, but errors in the opening affect clarity: “nothing have change” has problems with agreement and verb form, and “The departures area remain” also needs subject–verb agreement. Articles and sentence structure are often missing or awkward. Practise editing each sentence for a clear subject, a correctly formed verb and necessary articles before adding detail.

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