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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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223 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain consistently high: stay at a high level with little change
Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.
reach a peak of: rise to the highest recorded value
Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.
decline steadily: decrease gradually and consistently
Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.
by contrast: used to introduce a different or opposing pattern
Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The data presented in the table illustrates changes on internet usage to six different categories by age group. Overall, it can be seen that two activities, online games, download music and videos, teenagers and 20+ people more usage than old people. On the other hand, travel reservations and online purchase, old people (30-70+) more usage than teenagers. Email was used by almost all age groups, with figures between 90% and 95%. The highest proportion was in the 50s group, at 95%, while teens and people in their 60s had 90%.

For online games, the highest figures were for people in their 20s (88%) and teens (80%). The percentage fell to 36% among people in their 30s and 20% for those in their 50s, then rose a little to 29% in the 70+ group. Download music and videos also became less popular with age, decreasing from 52% among teens to 6% among people aged 70 and over.

Travel reservations were most popular among people in their 30s, at 74%. The figures for other adult age groups were between 51% and 65%, and no number is shown for teens. Online purchase was highest for people in their 30s, at 69%, and was 40% in the 70+ group. Searching for people had low figures, with 3% of teens and a high of 33% for the 30s.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the overview as two sentences: one on consistently high email use and one contrasting the age patterns for gaming/downloads with adult use of reservations and purchases.

Before drafting, mark the highest and lowest values in each row; use those figures to select comparisons, such as games peaking at 88% in the 20s and reservations at 74% in the 30s.

After writing, underline every main verb in the opening paragraph and check that each comparison has a clear subject, verb and age group.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

223

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The response identifies relevant patterns, including email use remaining high and music/video downloads falling from 52% among teens to 6% in the 70+ group. It also includes several accurate figures. However, the opening overview is difficult to interpret, and some comparisons are broad: for example, travel reservations peak in the 30s, not across all older groups. Next, state two precise overall trends before selecting supporting figures.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.0 Band

The later paragraphs group information by activity, and transitions such as “For online games” and “Travel reservations” help readers follow the comparisons. The opening, especially “On the other hand, travel reservations and online purchase,” does not clearly express a complete comparison, so the overview is hard to follow. Give the overview its own concise, grammatical sentences, then group related activities and compare age groups consistently.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

The answer uses relevant category vocabulary, including “online games,” “travel reservations” and “Searching for people,” and the later sections communicate several age comparisons. Some word combinations are inaccurate or unnatural: “changes on internet usage to” and “more usage” do not express the intended meaning clearly. Learn and use forms such as “patterns in internet use” and “used the internet for this activity more often,” checking each phrase against its sentence.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

There are some controlled simple sentences, for example, “The highest proportion was in the 50s group, at 95%.” However, the opening includes a sentence fragment or missing verb in “teenagers and 20+ people more usage,” and “online purchase, old people … more usage” has the same problem. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practise accurate plural forms and age-group expressions before adding comparisons.

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