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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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Task 1

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  • Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
  • Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
  • Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
  2. Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
  3. Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
  4. Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
  5. Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.
Useful vocabulary & examples
remain consistently high
stay at a high level with little change

Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.

reach a peak of
rise to the highest recorded value

Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.

decline steadily
decrease gradually and consistently

Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.

by contrast
used to introduce a different or opposing pattern

Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Band 4.0

The given table provided data on the proportion of six internet utilisation among different age groups. Overall, it is evident that using e-mail was the highest percentage between all ages groups,In addition online games are shown to be the most popular among individuals below 20s, whereas, Travel reservation and online purchase are more desirable for people in their 30s and 40s. The table shows that e-mail use was high in every group, with figures from 90% to 95%. Online games had very high numbers for teenagers and people in their 20s, at 80% and 88%, but the figure fell to 36% among people in their 30s. After this, results were around 20–29% for the older groups.

For music and videos, use went down as age increased, from 52% for teens to only 6% for the 70+ group. In comparison, travel reservations rose to 74% among people in their 30s and then stayed between 58% and 65% in groups from the 40s to 70+. Online purchase figures were also similar for ages 20s to 60s, between 64% and 69%, but were lower at 39% for teens and 40% for the 70+ group. Searching for people was the least common activity in most age groups, with only 3% of teenagers doing it, while other figures were mainly between 25% and 33%. This show that people use internet for different reasons depending on their age.

Targeted Improvement Tips

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Write a one-sentence overview that identifies the consistently high e-mail figures and the contrasting age patterns in gaming and music/video downloads.
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Group details by trend: compare e-mail and purchases, then describe the decline in gaming and downloads with age; include key peak or lowest figures.
3
After drafting, check every sentence for a full stop, correct age-group wording and subject–verb agreement, especially forms such as “This shows.”

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