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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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194 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain consistently high: stay at a high level with little change
Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.
reach a peak of: rise to the highest recorded value
Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.
decline steadily: decrease gradually and consistently
Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.
by contrast: used to introduce a different or opposing pattern
Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 5.0

The data given shows information on internet use in six group by age categories. Looking from an overall view, it can be seen that email is widely used by all of age groups. However, music, videos downloaded, and online games have downtrend percentage activities from young to older people. From a closer examination, electronic mail use was consistently high, ranging from 90% to 95%, and peaked among people in their 50s. It dipped to 90% in the 60s, then edged up to 91% in the 70+ group.

Online games peaked at 88% among people in their 20s, after 80% for teens. The figure then fell to 20% in the 50s, before recovering to 29% for people aged 70 and over. Downloading music and videos declined steadily from 52% among teens to 6% in the oldest group.

Online purchasing was highest in the 30s, at 69%, and fell to 40% among the 70+ group. Travel reservations also peaked in the 30s, at 74%; the figure was 51% in the 20s and 61% in the oldest group. Searching for people was low overall, with a high of 33% in the 30s and just 3% among teens.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening overview with two clear comparisons: email stays consistently high, while downloads fall with age; note that the games figures have a later rebound.

Group detailed data by pattern: describe email and downloads first, then compare the uneven trends in games, purchasing, travel reservations, and people searches.

Proofread the first three sentences specifically for plural forms and natural chart-reporting phrases, including “six age groups” and “the percentage declined.”

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Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

194

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The completed answer reports the main patterns and supports them with figures: email remains at 90–95%, downloads fall from 52% to 6%, and games rise again to 29% in the oldest group. However, the opening says games “have downtrend percentage activities” without mentioning their peak in the 20s or later recovery; the continuation supplies those details. Next time, state the overall trends accurately in the overview and flag important exceptions there.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to activity-specific details, and paragraphs help separate the comparisons. “From a closer examination” signals the shift, but the following “electronic mail use” repeats the email point rather than smoothly introducing the detailed comparisons. The abrupt jump from email to games and then to other activities also makes the grouping feel uneven. Use a concise overview, then group the remaining activities by similar patterns.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The answer uses relevant terms such as “online purchasing,” “peaked,” and “declined steadily,” and the continuation distinguishes several activities clearly. In contrast, “have downtrend percentage activities” and “videos downloaded” are unnatural combinations, while “electronic mail” is unnecessarily formal beside “email.” Practise standard chart-reporting collocations such as “the percentage declined” and “downloading music and videos,” then check each phrase for natural word order.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The continuation includes clear comparative sentences, for example, “It dipped to 90% in the 60s, then edged up to 91%.” The preserved opening has noticeable problems in “six group” and “all of age groups,” as well as an awkwardly formed clause about declining activities. Check plural nouns, articles, and sentence construction before submission; in particular, revise the opening for agreement and read it aloud to spot missing words.

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