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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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211 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain consistently high: stay at a high level with little change
Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.
reach a peak of: rise to the highest recorded value
Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.
decline steadily: decrease gradually and consistently
Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.
by contrast: used to introduce a different or opposing pattern
Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 6.0

The given table provides data on the proportion of six different internet utilizations by age groups. Overall, it is evident that using e-mail was the most common internet activities in all age groups. In addition, online games are shown to be popular among people below 20s, whereas travel reservations and online shoppings are more desirable among many adults than online games. Looking at the figures, e-mail use remained high and varied little, ranging from 90% among teenagers and people in their 60s to 95% in the 50s. Games reached a peak of 88% in the 20s, then fell to 36% in the 30s and 25% in the 40s, before remaining between 27% and 29% in older groups. Downloading music and videos declined steadily with age, from 52% for teenagers to just 6% for those aged 70 and over. Travel reservations rose from 30% among teenagers to a high of 74% in the 30s, then remained between 58% and 65% in older groups. Online purchases were most common among people in their 30s, at 69%, and least common among teenagers, at 39%. Searching for people was relatively uncommon, ranging from 3% among teenagers to a peak of 33% in the 30s, with a figure of 31% for those aged 70 and over.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the broad overview about what is “more desirable” with the clearest age-related peaks: games are highest in the 20s, travel reservations in the 30s, and online purchases in the 30s.

Check that each percentage is attached to the correct age group, especially the low game-use figure of 25% in the 40s and the 6% download figure for people aged 70 and over.

After drafting, check noun forms and agreement in the opening: use “internet activities,” “online shopping,” and a singular complement after “the most common.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

211

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The completed response identifies e-mail as the leading activity and reports useful contrasts, including games peaking at 88% in the 20s and music/video downloads falling to 6% among people aged 70 and over. Its coverage of all six categories is a strength. However, “more desirable among many adults” is vague and the opening overview could distinguish the age patterns more precisely. State the main peaks and declines directly.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview into a sequence of category comparisons, and signposts such as “Looking at the figures” help mark the detail section. This is generally easy to follow, though the opening sentence about preferences combines several categories without explaining their different age patterns. Group related trends—for example, age-declining activities together—and use a clear overview before the figures to make the comparison structure more deliberate.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

The response uses relevant terms such as “ranging from,” “reached a peak,” and “declined steadily” to describe the table. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, notably “internet utilizations” and “online shoppings”; the latter is also not the usual uncountable form. Prefer “internet activities” and “online shopping,” and choose specific verbs such as “accounted for” or “was most common” instead of the vague “more desirable.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

Several comparative sentences are controlled, including “Downloading music and videos declined steadily with age.” However, “using e-mail was the most common internet activities” has a singular–plural mismatch, and “people below 20s” is not a natural age-group construction. Review agreement between subjects and complements, and use forms such as “people in their teens.” Proofread the preserved opening carefully while keeping its intended meaning.

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