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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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212 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain consistently high: stay at a high level with little change
Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.
reach a peak of: rise to the highest recorded value
Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.
decline steadily: decrease gradually and consistently
Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.
by contrast: used to introduce a different or opposing pattern
Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 5.0

The internet usage in six various age groups is provided in the given table. Overall, it can be seen that the number of teens that rely on the internet mainly use it for news, online games, downloads and for buying products. As the age group increases, it can be seen that more and more people use it for travel reservations and online purchases, although these activities do not rise steadily in every older group. Email is the most common activity in all age groups, with figures between 90% and 95%, and it peaks at 95% among people in their 50s. By contrast, online games and downloading music or videos are more popular among younger users. Gaming reaches 88% in the 20s, compared with 20% among those in their 50s, while downloads fall from 52% for teens to just 6% for people aged 70 and over.

Online purchasing rises from 39% among teens to a high of 69% in the 30s, then falls to 40% in the oldest group. Travel reservations peak at 74% among people in their 30s, before decreasing to 58% in their 60s and rising slightly to 61% for the over-70s. Searching for people is comparatively uncommon, ranging from 3% among teens to a maximum of 33% in the 30s.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace “news” in the overview with activities actually listed in the table, and identify e-mail as the most consistently popular activity.

Before writing, note the peak and low point for each changing activity: for example, games peak at 88% in the 20s and downloads decline from 52% among teens to 6% among the over-70s.

After drafting, check subject–verb agreement in long noun phrases and remove repeated framing such as “it can be seen.”

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Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

212

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The continuation adds useful comparisons, such as downloads falling “from 52% for teens to just 6%” for the oldest group. However, the preserved overview says teens use the internet “for news,” which is not a category in the table, and its “number of teens” claim is unclear. The overview also misses e-mail’s consistently high figures. Next, name only activities shown and summarise the strongest overall patterns before giving details.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer moves from a general overview to comparisons of e-mail, games, downloads, shopping and travel, and “By contrast” helps signal a shift. However, the repeated framing “it can be seen” makes the opening cumbersome, and the initial overview does not prepare the reader for the later emphasis on e-mail. Next, group the overview’s main trends first, then organise the body around high, low and age-related patterns.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The response uses relevant chart language, including “peaks,” “decline,” and “comparatively uncommon,” and correctly names several activities. Some wording is imprecise or repetitive: “six various age groups” is awkward, while “buying products” is less concise than “online purchases.” The reference to “news” is also not supported by the table. Next, use the table’s exact category labels and vary repeated phrases with concise trend vocabulary.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The continuation includes clear comparative structures, for example “rises from 39% … to a high of 69% … then falls to 40%.” In the preserved opening, however, “the number of teens … mainly use it” has a subject–verb agreement problem: “number” is singular, while the sentence appears to mean the teens themselves. The repeated “it can be seen” also weighs down the sentence. Next, check the true subject of each clause and prefer direct constructions.

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