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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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212 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain consistently high: stay at a high level with little change
Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.
reach a peak of: rise to the highest recorded value
Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.
decline steadily: decrease gradually and consistently
Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.
by contrast: used to introduce a different or opposing pattern
Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 4.0

This table illustrates the respective of internet use by the generations. Overall, while some Internet activities were widely used by different ages others were commonly used between Teenagers and 70s. E-mail was by far the most popular Internet function since over the 90% of all generations into it. The popularity of the Online games was also very high with the two youngest groups, at 80% of teenagers and a peak of 88% among people in their twenties. After this, the figures dropped to 36% for people in their thirties and 20% for those in their fifties, before rising slightly to 27% and 29% in the two oldest groups. Downloading music and videos decreased with age, from 52% of teenagers to just 6% of people aged 70 and over. Travel reservations showed a different pattern. The figure rose from 51% among people in their twenties to 74% in their thirties, then fell to 58% for the 60s group, before increasing slightly to 61% for those aged 70 and over. Online purchases were consistently popular among people aged 20 to 60, at around 64–69%, but lower among teenagers and the oldest group. Searching for people was least popular with teenagers, at 3%, while the other age groups recorded figures from 25% to 33%.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the broad overview with two main findings: email use is consistently high across all ages, while other activities show greater age-related variation.

Group the body comparisons: report games and downloads together, then compare travel, shopping and searching; include the key highs and lows rather than listing every value.

Before submitting, check the opening for noun forms, articles and prepositions; specifically revise “respective of,” “between … and,” and “over the 90%.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

212

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The answer includes relevant comparisons, such as games reaching “a peak of 88%” in the twenties and music downloads falling “from 52% of teenagers to just 6%” among the oldest group. However, the overview’s claim that activities were “commonly used between Teenagers and 70s” is unclear and does not identify the main contrasts. Next, state that email dominates across ages, while games and downloads vary more by age.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview into games, downloads, travel, purchases and searching, so the reader can follow its broad progression. The shift from “The popularity of the Online games” to the remaining activities would be clearer with a deliberate grouping of age-sensitive activities and other patterns. Also, “Overall” is followed by a vague comparison rather than a concise summary of the table. Organise the body into two clear comparison groups and use a precise overview.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Some task-relevant vocabulary is effective, including “most popular,” “dropped” and “rose,” and the answer uses percentages to make comparisons concrete. However, “the respective of internet use” is not a natural phrase, while “the Online games” has unnecessary capitalization and “into it” does not express use clearly. Build a small bank of accurate phrases such as “the proportion who used,” “peaked at,” and “fell to,” then apply them consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The answer attempts complex links, for example “while some Internet activities were widely used…,” and its later comparisons are generally understandable. Several errors in the opening affect clarity: “the respective of” has an incorrect word form, “between Teenagers and 70s” uses an unsuitable construction, and “over the 90% … into it” is ungrammatical. Practise checking articles, prepositions and complete verb phrases, then proofread each overview sentence aloud.

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