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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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220 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain consistently high: stay at a high level with little change
Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.
reach a peak of: rise to the highest recorded value
Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.
decline steadily: decrease gradually and consistently
Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.
by contrast: used to introduce a different or opposing pattern
Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 6.0

The presented table compares the proportion of internet usage among 7 differentyear-old arrays of age with 6 activities. It is generally seen that 7 age groups using the internet for sending emails hold the lion’s share, while the figure for downloading music and videos accounted for the lowest utilization in all age groups. Teenagers don’t show the same pattern across the remaining activities. Email use is consistently high, ranging from 90% among teenagers and people in their 60s to a peak of 95% in the 50s. By contrast, downloading music and videos is the least common activity in every group, falling from 52% of teenagers to just 6% of those aged 70 and over.

Online gaming also declines with age: the proportion drops from 80% among teenagers to 29% in both the 60s and 70+ groups. Travel reservations move in the opposite direction for most groups, rising from 5% for teenagers to 60% for people in their 50s, then dipping to 58% before reaching 61% in the oldest group. Online purchasing is most popular among people in their 30s, at 69%; it ranges from 64% to 69% among those in their 20s to 60s, then falls to 40% among people aged 70 and over. Searching for people is lowest among teenagers (3%) and highest among people in their 30s (33%).

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the malformed opening description with a direct sentence naming the table’s six activities and seven age groups.

Write a one-sentence overview of the strongest patterns before presenting figures: email is consistently high, while downloads are consistently lowest.

Check each comparison against the table, especially peaks and changes between age groups; distinguish a rise, a dip, and a later increase accurately.

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Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

220

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The continuation covers all six activities and selects useful comparisons, including the contrast between email use and downloading media, and the age-related fall in gaming. The figures for the travel-reservation pattern are also reported accurately. However, the preserved opening calls the age groups “differentyear-old arrays of age,” which obscures the table’s subject. For a clearer overview, identify the age groups directly and summarise the main patterns before giving detailed figures.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer develops in a sensible order: it introduces the table, discusses email and downloads, then groups the remaining activities into comparisons. Transitions such as “By contrast” and “also declines with age” help signal relationships. However, “Teenagers don’t show the same pattern across the remaining activities” is vague, and the opening is difficult to follow. State the overall contrasts plainly, then use one paragraph for related activity trends.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

There is some effective task vocabulary, including “consistently high,” “declines with age,” and “least common activity.” However, “differentyear-old arrays of age” is not a natural or clear description of the groups, while “hold the lion’s share” is an informal idiom for this report. Replace these with precise phrases such as “seven age groups” and “the highest proportions”; this would make the comparisons more appropriate and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The continuation uses several clear comparison structures, for example, “falling from 52% … to just 6%,” and generally forms its sentences accurately. The preserved opening, however, contains a serious malformed phrase: “7 differentyear-old arrays of age.” The next sentence also has an unclear subject in “7 age groups using the internet … hold.” Practise building a direct subject–verb sentence, such as “The table compares six activities across seven age groups.”

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