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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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235 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Email use is remarkably stable across the age groups, staying between 90% and 95%.
Downloading music and videos shows a clear age-related decline, from 52% among teenagers to 6% among people aged 70 and over.
Some activities have an age-group peak rather than a steady trend: gaming is highest in the 20s, while online shopping and searching for people peak in the 30s.

Suggested structure

Introduce the table, its subject and the age groups.
Give an overview of the most consistent pattern and the clearest age-related change.
Compare email and gaming using their highest, lowest and contrasting age-group figures.
Describe downloads, shopping and searching, grouping figures by trend or peak.
Add the travel-reservation comparison using only values that can be matched confidently to their age groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain consistently high: stay at a high level with little change
Email use remains consistently high across the age groups.
reach a peak of: rise to the highest recorded value
Online shopping reaches a peak of 69% among people in their 30s.
decline steadily: decrease gradually and consistently
Downloads decline steadily from 52% among teenagers to 6% in the 70+ group.
by contrast: used to introduce a different or opposing pattern
Email use changes little; by contrast, gaming varies considerably by age.

Task Prompt

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 7.0

The table presents data on six different internet activities by age group. Overall, some tasks which can be done by the internet are highly used by elderly people, and, on the contrary, by young people. However, there are some activities which are highly demanded by all age groups. As it can be seen from the table, e-mail is consistently the most popular activity, while online games and downloading media are more common among younger users. Shopping online and making travel reservations are also popular across most age groups, whereas searching for people attracts a smaller proportion.

E-mail use remains high in every group, ranging from 90% among teenagers and people in their 60s to a peak of 95% among those in their 50s. Online gaming drops sharply after the 20s, from 88% in that group to 20% among people in their 50s, then rises slightly to 29% in the oldest group. Downloading music and videos declines steadily from 52% of teenagers to just 6% of people aged 70 and over.

By contrast, travel reservations are most common among those in their 30s, at 74%, and remain at 51–65% in the other adult groups shown. Online purchasing peaks at 69% among people in their 30s, stays close to the mid-60s through the 60s, and falls to 40% among the over-70s. Searching for people is the least common activity overall, with figures between 3% and 33%.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the overview in two clear trend groups: activities that are most popular among younger users, and activities that remain high or peak among middle-aged users.

Use precise percentage language, such as “accounted for 90%” or “was used by 90%,” instead of “highly used” or “highly demanded.”

Check every comparison against the table and name both the age group and the figure, especially when describing a peak or a decline.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

235

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The report selects the main patterns, including that e-mail is “consistently the most popular activity” and that downloads fall from 52% to 6%. It also gives useful comparisons for travel and online shopping. However, the opening claim about activities being highly used by older people and, conversely, young people is unclear, and the overview could state the age-related contrast more precisely. Next, make the overview distinguish activities that decline with age from those that peak in middle age.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to details about e-mail, games and downloads, then contrasts these with reservations, shopping and people-searching. The paragraphing and transitions such as “By contrast” help the reader follow the comparisons. The first overview sentence, “some tasks … by elderly people, and, on the contrary, by young people,” obscures which activities belong to each pattern. For a clearer progression, group details explicitly by trends across age groups.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is relevant range in expressions such as “drops sharply,” “declines steadily” and “peaks at 69%,” which communicate changes efficiently. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, notably “highly used” and “highly demanded” for percentages of internet users. Replace these with terms such as “more popular” or “used by a higher proportion”; reserve “demand” for contexts that actually concern demand for a product or service.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

The response uses both simple and more complex structures, including the contrast in “while online games and downloading media are more common among younger users.” Most numerical comparisons are expressed clearly. The phrase “As it can be seen from the table” has an unnecessary subject construction; use “As can be seen from the table.” The opening also has an awkwardly balanced contrast. Practise concise comparison clauses with a clear subject for each age-related trend.

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