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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example
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Ideas to explore
- Compare the sexes by age band: men have the higher rate only among 15–24-year-olds.
- Describe the contrasting patterns: the male rate falls to a low among 35–44-year-olds before recovering, while the female rate rises to a plateau above 50% from ages 35 to 64.
- Highlight the endpoint: the two rates are almost equal among people aged 65 and over.
Suggested structure
- Introduce the chart, population, measure, age groups, and year.
- Give an overview of the main gender contrast and the near-equal oldest-group figures.
- Describe the male figures across the age groups, noting the low and later recovery.
- Describe the female figures, noting the rise and peak, then compare the oldest group.
Useful vocabulary & examples
- participation rate
- The percentage of a group taking part in an activity.
The male participation rate reached its lowest point among 35–44-year-olds.
- reach a low
- Fall to the smallest value in the figures being discussed.
The figure for men reached a low of roughly 39% in the 35–44 age group.
- peak at
- Reach the highest value in a set of figures.
Female participation peaked at approximately 53% in two age groups.
- remain almost level
- Be very similar, with only a small difference.
The male and female rates remained almost level among those aged 65 and over.
Task Prompt
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THE CHART ILLUSTRATES THE PERCENTAGE OF EACH GENDER WITH DIFFERENT AGE GAPS IN AUSTRALIA WHO ENGAGED IN PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES IN 2010. OVERALL, IT CAN BE SAID THAT ALTHOUGH THE FIGURES FOR FEMALES SHOWED AN UPWARD TREND, THERE WAS A SLIGHT FLUCTUATION IN THE SHARE OF MALES DURING A YEAR. LOOKING AT THE ACTIVITY OF WOMEN, THE PROPORTION WAS ABOUT 48% AMONG THOSE AGED 15 TO 24. It then rose slightly to around 49% for women aged 25 to 34, before increasing to approximately 53% in the 35-to-44 group. The figure reached a peak of about 54% among women aged 45 to 54, then dipped a little to 53% for those aged 55 to 64. In the oldest group, the proportion fell to roughly 47%. For men, the highest rate was in the youngest group, at about 52%. This dropped to 42% among 25-to-34-year-olds and reached a low of around 39% for those aged 35 to 44. The male figure then rose gradually, reaching about 45% among 55-to-64-year-olds and approximately 47% in the oldest group. Men were more active only in the youngest age group; women had higher rates in the four middle groups, while the figures were almost equal among people aged 65 and over.
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