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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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185 words AcademicTask 1Bar Chart
Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Compare each country group with the parity benchmark of 100, noting that developed countries reached or exceeded it only in tertiary education.
  • Identify the largest increase: developing countries’ secondary ratio rose by 10 points, from 72 to 82.
  • Highlight the widest gap: tertiary education in 1998 had figures of 75 in developing countries and 112 in developed countries.

Suggested structure

  1. Paraphrase what the chart measures and state the years and education levels.
  2. Give an overview of the overall group difference and identify the most notable level.
  3. Describe the three developing-country ratios, including their changes over time and position relative to 100.
  4. Compare the developed-country figures and finish with the largest gap.
Useful vocabulary & examples
gender parity
Equal representation of females and males, shown here by a ratio of 100 girls per 100 boys.

The developed-country primary ratio was close to gender parity in both years.

edge up
Increase by a small amount.

The developed-country primary ratio edged up from 95 to 96.

remain below the target
Stay under a stated benchmark or goal.

All three developing-country ratios remained below the target of 100 in 1998.

the gap between the groups
The difference between the figures for two categories.

The gap between the groups was largest in tertiary education in 1998.

Task Prompt

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education.
IELTS Writing Task 1 visual

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The bar graph illustrates the information about the enrollment of girls per 100 boys in various levels of school education( primary education, secondary education, and tertiary education). produced from 1990 to 1998. The X-axis represents the developed countries and the developing countries, and the Y-axis demonstrates the number of female students. Overall, what stands out is that the figures were higher in developed countries in all three levels, while the target of 100 was reached only by developed countries in tertiary education. The ratios increased between 1990 and 1998 in every category, although some changes were small.

In primary education, the figure for developing countries rose from 83 to 87 girls per 100 boys, whereas developed countries recorded 95 and then 96. In secondary education, developing countries increased more noticeably, from 72 to 82, while the developed-country figure edged up from 98 to 99, remaining just below the target. Tertiary education had the lowest ratios for developing countries, at 66 in 1990 and 75 in 1998. By contrast, the developed-country figure was already above target at 105 and climbed to 112, the highest value shown.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Replace the description of the vertical axis with the precise measure: girls enrolled per 100 boys.
2
Write a complete introduction that identifies the categories and the years being compared; do not leave “produced from 1990 to 1998” as a separate fragment.
3
For each level, compare both countries’ figures and include the relevant change, while checking that the target line is described accurately.

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