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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Further study was the leading destination for both graduates and postgraduates.
  • Voluntary work was the least common option in each group.
  • Graduate counts exceeded postgraduate counts in all four categories, with the biggest absolute difference in further study.

Suggested structure

  1. Paraphrase the chart topic and specify the year and population.
  2. Give an overview of the shared highest and lowest categories.
  3. Report graduate figures in rank order, grouping the leading choices and the smaller categories.
  4. Report postgraduate figures in the same order to make comparisons easy.
  5. Close with the most notable difference between the two groups.
Useful vocabulary & examples
the most common destination
The option chosen by the largest number of people.

Further study was the most common destination for both groups.

ranked second
Was the second-highest category in a set of figures.

Part-time work ranked second for graduates.

by contrast
A linking phrase used to introduce a noticeably different figure or fact.

By contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.

the largest difference
The greatest gap between two compared figures.

The largest difference between the groups was in further study.

Task Prompt

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Band 4.0

This bar chart depicts in 2008 UK students weather be graduate or postgraduate who did not go part time work after leaving college . It is clear from the graph that UK graduate students did work partly led with 17.735 percentage. Whereas the number of students that did part time job was 2,535%. UK graduates also had 3,500 students in voluntary work, while 29,665 continued to further study. The number of graduates who were unemployed was 16,235. In comparison, the postgraduate figures were much smaller in all four destinations. Further study was the most common outcome for this group too, at 2,725 students. Part-time work was close behind, with 2,535 postgraduates. By contrast, only 1,625 were unemployed and 345 did voluntary work, the lowest figure shown. Overall, further study was the leading destination among graduates and postgraduates, while voluntary work was the least common. The charts show numbers of students rather than percentages. They also indicate that part-time work was more common than unemployment among postgraduates, whereas graduate numbers for these two destinations were similar, with part-time work slightly higher.

Targeted Improvement Tips

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Start with a grammatically complete paraphrase identifying the two groups, the year, and the fact that the charts show destinations other than full-time work.
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Add a short overview before the details: further study is the largest category for both groups, and voluntary work is the smallest.
3
Check every figure against the chart and label it as a number of students; do not add percentage signs.

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