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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Further study was the leading destination for both graduates and postgraduates.
Voluntary work was the least common option in each group.
Graduate counts exceeded postgraduate counts in all four categories, with the biggest absolute difference in further study.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and specify the year and population.
Give an overview of the shared highest and lowest categories.
Report graduate figures in rank order, grouping the leading choices and the smaller categories.
Report postgraduate figures in the same order to make comparisons easy.
Close with the most notable difference between the two groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

the most common destination: The option chosen by the largest number of people.
Further study was the most common destination for both groups.
ranked second: Was the second-highest category in a set of figures.
Part-time work ranked second for graduates.
by contrast: A linking phrase used to introduce a noticeably different figure or fact.
By contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.
the largest difference: The greatest gap between two compared figures.
The largest difference between the groups was in further study.

Task Prompt

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 6.0

The two bar charts illustrate destination of UK students who are graduate and postgraduate, excluding full-time work, after leaving college in 2008. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the most of Uk graduate and postgraduate students further their studies. Furthermore, their continued to study after leaving college while some students had a part-time job, or were unemployed or did voluntary work.

For graduates, further study was by far the most common destination, at 29,665 students. Part-time employment ranked second, with 17,735, narrowly above unemployment, which accounted for 16,235. Only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work, making this the least popular option.

A similar pattern is visible among postgraduates: 2,725 continued their studies, slightly more than the 2,535 who took part-time jobs. Unemployment affected 1,625 people, while just 345 did voluntary work, again the smallest figure. In every category, graduate numbers were substantially higher than postgraduate numbers. The largest gap was in further study, at 26,940 students; the differences were also notable for part-time work and unemployment, while the voluntary-work gap was smaller, at 3,155. Overall, further study led in both groups, while voluntary work remained least common.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a two-part overview that names the most and least common destinations for both groups before giving detailed figures.

Check every chart figure against its category and group; then use parallel sentences to compare graduate and postgraduate numbers.

Proofread the opening specifically for article use, UK capitalization, and subject forms such as “they” rather than “their.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

196

Type

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The answer identifies the main pattern—“further study was by far the most common destination”—and gives all four figures for each group accurately. It also compares the groups, including the largest difference in further study. The overview is weakened by “the most of” and the awkward opening summary, but the report otherwise selects the relevant features. Next, make the overview concise and state the leading and least common destinations without repetition.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to graduate figures, then postgraduate figures and a direct comparison. Phrases such as “A similar pattern is visible among postgraduates” help readers follow the shift between groups. However, the opening repeats the overview idea, and the comparison is added late rather than integrated with the category details. Next, group each category’s two figures together where useful, then finish with one concise comparison.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is suitable chart-reporting vocabulary, including “ranked second,” “accounted for,” and “least popular option.” These phrases help distinguish rankings and describe the counts clearly. Some wording is awkward or imprecise, especially “illustrate destination” and “their continued to study,” and “further study” is repeated often. Next, use accurate collocations such as “the destinations of” and vary repetition with “this option” only when the reference stays clear.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The later sentences use some controlled complex structures, for example “while just 345 did voluntary work” and the comparison beginning “while the voluntary-work gap was smaller.” However, the preserved opening contains clear errors: “the most of” and “their continued” do not form correct constructions, and “Uk” needs standard capitalization. Next, practise checking articles, subject pronouns and verb forms before submitting, while retaining the clear sentence patterns used later.

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