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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Further study was the leading destination for both graduates and postgraduates.
Voluntary work was the least common option in each group.
Graduate counts exceeded postgraduate counts in all four categories, with the biggest absolute difference in further study.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and specify the year and population.
Give an overview of the shared highest and lowest categories.
Report graduate figures in rank order, grouping the leading choices and the smaller categories.
Report postgraduate figures in the same order to make comparisons easy.
Close with the most notable difference between the two groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

the most common destination: The option chosen by the largest number of people.
Further study was the most common destination for both groups.
ranked second: Was the second-highest category in a set of figures.
Part-time work ranked second for graduates.
by contrast: A linking phrase used to introduce a noticeably different figure or fact.
By contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.
the largest difference: The greatest gap between two compared figures.
The largest difference between the groups was in further study.

Task Prompt

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The given graphs describe the distribution of UK graduates and postgraduates (excluding full-time work) after leaving university in 2008. Overall, there were UK graduates and postgraduates who did not enter full time work because opted to continuing they further study, which were the most favored destination, while engaging in voluntary work remained the least portion. For graduates, further study was by far the most common destination, at 29,665 students. Part-time work was next, with 17,735, slightly more than unemployment (16,235). Voluntary work was much less common, at 3,500. The pattern for postgraduates was similar in that further study also ranked first, with 2,725 people, although this was only 190 more than part-time work (2,535). Unemployment accounted for 1,625 postgraduates, while voluntary work was again the smallest category, at 345. Comparing the two groups, graduate figures were higher in every destination. The largest gap was in further study, where the number of graduates exceeded the postgraduate total by 26,940. The difference was also substantial for part-time work (15,200), whereas the gap in voluntary work was 3,155. Overall, further study led in both groups, while voluntary work was the least common choice.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening explanation with a neutral overview: identify further study as the largest category for both groups and voluntary work as the smallest.

Check that every figure is attached to the correct group and destination; then include one or two meaningful comparisons, such as the 190-student difference between postgraduate further study and part-time work.

Proofread the overview for complete clauses, subject–verb agreement and verb forms; specifically check structures after “because” and “to.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

200

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The continuation reports the main pattern and gives accurate figures, including graduates’ further-study total of 29,665 and the postgraduate total of 2,725. It also compares the groups, noting that graduate numbers were higher in every category. However, the opening claim that people did not work full time “because opted to continuing they further study” wrongly suggests that further study explains every destination. Next, describe the chart population neutrally before summarising the leading and smallest categories.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to graduate figures, postgraduate figures and a direct comparison, so the sequence is easy to follow. “Comparing the two groups” clearly signals the final section. The opening sentence, however, combines several ideas in an awkward, confusing structure, and “Overall” appears again in the conclusion without adding much. Keep one concise overview, then use the category-based comparison to organise the body.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

There is useful task vocabulary in phrases such as “most common destination,” “smallest category” and “the largest gap,” and the response distinguishes the four destinations consistently. Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “full time work” needs a hyphen as a compound modifier, and “the least portion” does not naturally describe a chart category. Replace it with “the least common destination” and use “number of students” or “figure” precisely when comparing totals.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The continuation uses mostly controlled past-tense statements and comparison structures, for example, “graduate figures were higher in every destination.” However, the preserved opening contains serious errors in “because opted to continuing they further study” and “which were the most favored destination.” These make the overview difficult to understand and show problems with clause structure, verb forms and agreement. Practise rewriting the overview as two short, complete sentences before adding the detailed comparisons.

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