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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Further study was the leading destination for both graduates and postgraduates.
Voluntary work was the least common option in each group.
Graduate counts exceeded postgraduate counts in all four categories, with the biggest absolute difference in further study.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and specify the year and population.
Give an overview of the shared highest and lowest categories.
Report graduate figures in rank order, grouping the leading choices and the smaller categories.
Report postgraduate figures in the same order to make comparisons easy.
Close with the most notable difference between the two groups.

Useful vocabulary & examples

the most common destination: The option chosen by the largest number of people.
Further study was the most common destination for both groups.
ranked second: Was the second-highest category in a set of figures.
Part-time work ranked second for graduates.
by contrast: A linking phrase used to introduce a noticeably different figure or fact.
By contrast, only 3,500 graduates undertook voluntary work.
the largest difference: The greatest gap between two compared figures.
The largest difference between the groups was in further study.

Task Prompt

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 7.0

The bar graphs displays UK graduate and postgraduate pupils who did not go into full-time job after finishing their university in 2008. Overall, the most common destination of UK in the year for graduate and postgraduate students was further study and the least common was voluntary work Likewise,a significant number of students at 29,665 chose further study. For graduates, part-time work was the next most common outcome, at 17,735, followed by unemployment, with 16,235 people. Voluntary work accounted for just 3,500 graduates.

The pattern among postgraduates was similar: further study was highest, at 2,725, narrowly ahead of part-time work, at 2,535. Unemployment affected 1,625 postgraduates, while voluntary work was the least common destination, at 345.

In every category, the graduate figure was higher than the postgraduate figure. The gap was largest for further study, at 26,940, and part-time work, at 15,200. The smallest difference was in voluntary work, with 3,155 more graduates than postgraduates. Overall, further study was the leading destination for both groups, whereas volunteering was the least common.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening phrase with a clear description of the population and date, such as “The charts compare the destinations of UK graduates and postgraduates who did not enter full-time employment in 2008.”

Separate the overview into two sentences: identify the highest and lowest categories for both groups, then move to the supporting figures.

Before submitting, check each comparison against the chart and proofread specifically for plural verb forms and punctuation between sentences.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

181

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response identifies the main pattern accurately: “further study” is highest and “voluntary work” is lowest for both groups, and it reports the figures for all four destinations. The comparisons between the groups are also supported by the chart. However, the opening description is unclear (“destination of UK in the year”), and the overview is weakened by its run-on punctuation. Next, state the groups and units clearly, then make the overview a separate, concise sentence.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to graduate figures, postgraduate figures, and then a comparison, so the information has a sensible overall progression. The paragraph break before “The pattern among postgraduates” helps distinguish the groups. However, “Likewise,a” runs directly into the next sentence and makes the overview difficult to follow. Use clear sentence boundaries and group the details consistently by category or by student group.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary such as “unemployment,” “voluntary work,” and “the gap was largest,” and these choices communicate the comparisons. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural: “pupils” is not the clearest label for people who have left university, and “go into full-time job” is awkward. Use standard task language such as “graduates,” “postgraduates,” and “full-time employment,” while avoiding repeated use of “destination.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The answer includes some controlled comparative structures, for example “narrowly ahead of part-time work,” and uses figures within sentences clearly. However, the opening “The bar graphs displays” has subject–verb disagreement, and “Likewise,a” lacks the needed space and sentence punctuation. The first sentence also has an unclear noun phrase. Check plural subjects, articles, and sentence boundaries, then proofread the overview separately.

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