Back to Writing Hub

User-written IELTS example

Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

Original task prompt, user essay, band score, and related examples in the same report workspace.

179 words AcademicTask 1Process Diagram
Task 1

Illustrative target band for this original model answer.

Plan your answer

Try your own response before reading the samples.

Ideas to explore

  • The process has two parallel preparation routes: one for potatoes and one for fresh salmon.
  • The diagram gives different time limits for the ingredients: potatoes may be held for up to one month, while salmon is processed within 12 hours or less.
  • After preparation, the ingredients meet at assembly; the pies are wrapped, frozen, stored and dispatched.

Suggested structure

  1. Paraphrase the process title and give an overview of the separate ingredient routes and their convergence.
  2. Describe the potato preparation sequence in diagram order, including its stated storage period.
  3. Describe the salmon route, including the seasoning, cooking, removal of skin and bones, and inspection.
  4. Explain assembly and finish with wrapping, freezing, storage and dispatch.
Useful vocabulary & examples
be kept for up to one month
to remain in storage for no longer than a month

The potatoes may be kept for up to one month before they are cleaned.

be stripped of its skin and bones
to have the outer skin and bones removed

After cooking, the salmon is stripped of its skin and bones.

converge at assembly
to come together at the stage where components are combined

The potato and salmon preparation routes converge at assembly.

be dispatched
to be sent out from a place to its destination

The frozen pies are stored before they are dispatched.

Task Prompt

The diagram give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.
IELTS Writing Task 1 visual

User Essay Analysis

Review the public answer with report-style highlights.

Band 7.0

The flow chart depicts the process of producing fish pie. From an overall perspective, there are about 17 stages. It commences with delivering potatoes and fresh salmon and culminates with storing and dispatching. It is also worth mentioning that complex machinery and human work are involved. Focusing on the preparation of potatoes, the initial stages involve cleaning, peeling and slicing them. They are then boiled and chilled before being stored. Potato delivery can take up to one month, whereas fresh salmon arrives within 12 hours or less. The potatoes are handled on the upper conveyor, while salmon preparation takes place on the lower line. The fish is seasoned with lemon juice and salt, then cooked in a steam oven. After cooking, its skin and bones are removed, and the fish is inspected. Prepared peas and sauce are also added to the production line. The potatoes, salmon, peas and sauce are brought together, and the pies are wrapped. Finally, the wrapped pies are frozen before being stored and dispatched. Overall, the process combines two ingredient-preparation routes before packaging and distribution.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Replace the approximate stage count with an overview of the two ingredient routes and the shared finishing stages.
2
Use a direct overview sentence, then organise the body by the potato route, salmon route and final assembly.
3
Practise process collocations such as “manual work,” “remove the skin and bones,” and “store and dispatch.”

Related examples for this topic

Compare different bands on the same IELTS prompt.

Browse all